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Paths

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There are no wrong paths.
Though not all can be correct.
One can only walk.
This is another one the haikus that I have been writing lately.

Edit: I went through and reworked some of the puctuation that I've been critiqued on.
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TristanCody's avatar
Firstly, you have a really bold ending line. This sort of thought about what we can do as humans. I quite like that! My only somewhat-critiquing comment is that the punctuation (the use of a period at every line) seems to stop the poem has it is about to turn. Maybe change that up? Just a thought though. I still love it. :clap: